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Untitled--Chapter 1

The (Cyber) Bag of Weasels

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"About as much fun as a bag of weasels"...when I first saw this Irish adage, it made me think of the life of a writer: sometimes perilous, sometimes painful, certainly interesting. My paper journal has always been called "The Bag of Weasels." This is the Bag of Weasels' online home.

Untitled--Chapter 1

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Chapter 1

In Valinor, all the days are beautiful.

It becomes hard to tell them apart after a while, and soon, you learn to keep yourself busy so that they don’t congeal into a blinding stream of light. Normally, my lessons keep me busy for much of the day; other days—my favorites—Ada will take us hunting in the forest or I will ride to Tirion with my brothers. But not this day: Today, I have been given a day off, in recognition of my youth and my purported need for rest, and the bland beauty of the day threatens to drive me mad with boredom.

I am lying in the field behind the house, and I can hear Ada instructing his apprentices in the forge and Macalaurë playing scales in the house. Hammerfalls occasionally ring from Ada’s forge, and like water drops plunking into a still pond, they ripple the silence that stretches over the meadow. I stare up at the sky, an endless dome of blue, cloudless this day, the shape and color of the insides of the robins’ eggs that have begun littering the ground, the first signs of spring. The grass in the field is tall, lush green like emeralds, and it prickles my back through my light tunic. It is Laurelin’s zenith, and the light is searing. I close my eyes, yet still cannot escape: The light is red now, the color of the blood inside of my eyelids.

I do not expect the blackness when it jumps out at me from a tall clump of grass. Its knees land squarely on my chest, and it yells, “Gah!” The wind is forced from my lungs for an instant, before I can gasp and bring it back, and the dark shape laughs at this and kneels on my chest and tangles its little fingers in my hair.

“Turko!” it says.

I open my eyes and stare into the dark gray eyes of my baby brother Carnistir. Only four years old, he is free also on this day, and the warmth of the afternoon has brought color to his cheeks. His hair is so dark that the light on it makes it glow gold, as if the light is being reflected in a mirror. I sit up and knock Carnistir aside, but as quickly as his little, round bottom touches the ground, he is scrambling at me again, to sit in my lap with his head on my chest and his thumb in his mouth.

I feel sorry for him, for he must be as bored as I am. His jet hair burns my hand as I stroke it. “What do you want?” I ask him, and he answers, one word, lisped because of the thumb: “Nelyo.”

I need no further encouragement, and with a grin splitting my face, must restrain myself from running long enough to take Carnistir’s hand and lead him back across the meadow with my back held straight and tall, as I imagine Nelyo would walk, if he were here.


It was Maitimo who started the habit of us calling him Nelyo. At counsels, at festivals, at loose social gatherings, he would always introduce himself as Maitimo—Maitimo, the well-shaped one—taking strangers’ hands with an elegant poise that my brothers and I would half mock and half envy. But at home, when the halls echo with our greedy cries, seeking him, demanding his attention, it is never Maitimo and always “Nelyo! Nelyo!”

Nelyo is not fond of his father-name Nelyafinwë; I heard him tell Macalaurë once that he thought it pompous and bland. “Third Finwë,” a name denoting succession and nothing of the person behind it, while Macalaurë is Strong-voiced and I am Powerful and Carnistir is Dark, he is only a place in line, and a fruitless place at that, for the Elves are immortal, and Ada never expected to be king and certainly never expected to die and leave the crown to Nelyo.

But there it was, Nelyo, the name we called him, a derivative of the disfavored father-name. He likes his mother-name—after all, who doesn’t like to be remembered as being beautiful?—and I always liked the way people’s voices would rise on the first syllable of it when they realized his dry eccentricities were actually jests. Maitimo! they would laugh, and he would smile, rare and beautiful, and the light of his eyes would flicker and dance like Telperion on the water. He even has an epessë, Russandol, given to him by our grandfather Mahtan in recognition of their shared copper-colored hair, and aunts and uncles and cousins call him such to denote familiarity, but when I was small, always my brothers and I called him Nelyo.

The way Ada tells it, Maitimo was making his first fumbling attempts at speech when he forever titled himself Nelyo. He was nearly a year old and fond of grabbing handfuls of whatever was closest at hand and staring at our father with his wide eyes until Ada named it for him. Mud. Grass. Pebbles. Water. He clutched a handful of Ada’s hair. “Ai!” Ada said, and Nelyafinwë Maitimo relaxed a bit, and Ada said, “Fëanaro. Ada.”

“Fëya…Ada….” Nelyo fumbled before reaching shyly to clasp his own tunic, the fingers of his other hand still wrapped in Ada’s hair, his eyes locked with our father’s. “Ada…?”

“Nelyafinwë Maitimo,” said our father, always the overachiever, as though his infant son would be able to handle the multisyllabic name. When my brothers and I were angry at our father for his strict expectations, we would joke with each other to hide the sting of his criticisms, saying that Ada had been born speaking and walking, with a hammer in one hand and a quill in another, decrying the state of modern midwifery that forced him to be born naked and in such an unsavory manner. But Nelyo was not so prodigious in his early youth, and his face pursed in puzzlement as he inquired, “Nelyo?”

From then on, he was Nelyo. We—his brothers—were born one by one thereafter, and we learned first to call for Ada and Nana and Nelyo, the three who would come and ease us from our nightmares and into the circle of their arms, cuddling us close to dispel the tremors—was it cold? was it fear?—and kissing away the tears on our cheeks. “Maitimo” was too much for our young voices, and “Nelyafinwë” was worse—for us as it had been for him—so we called for Nelyo, and he always came.


During Laurelin’s hours, our house in Tirion is full of noise and loneliness. We are only four brothers: Nelyo, Macalaurë, and myself, and Carnistir, only a few years old and at the age where he is able to run and unable to perceive when he should not. Carnistir had been a surprise to me: Even after Ada had explained that I was going to be a big brother, I hadn’t believed it. Not really. I was the baby, and I would always be the baby. The one who always had to hold someone’s hand when we went to festivals. The one who would ride in front of Ada on his horse when we took our summer trips to Formenos, my head lolling back against his chest and dreaming of the dusty summer air and his heartbeat. The one who earned looks of mixed amusement and strained patience at mealtimes, when I made comments about how I had seen berries identical to the ones Nana had brought home for dessert in a spot of bird leavings. Even when Nana’s belly swelled until it bumped me off her lap, I believed that I would always be the baby. Even when Nelyo held me close in his bedroom one evening, and Macalaurë sat beside us and played nervous ditties on his lute, trying to stem my tears, for I had seen the frantic fear in Ada’s eyes and I was shocked and terrified by Nana’s cries, I believed that I would always be the baby. Even when her voice rose, and mine met it, and a stranger’s voice added to the melee, I believed that I would always be the baby. And Nelyo stroked my hair and smiled and whispered proudly in my ear that I was a big brother and took me to meet the baby Carnistir and hold him in my arms.

But once Carnistir was born, I learned to enjoy the special regard of being one of Fëanaro’s elder sons. And the six of us seemed to make a perfect portrait: Four sons, enough to be blessed, but not enough to yet earn raised eyebrows and smirking comments about our parents’ extraordinary fertility. And just when I had grown comfortable with Carnistir as the baby, then Curufinwë was there; and just when I had convinced myself that I had been wrong before—that six in a family was not as near to perfection as seven—and I had grown snug in the middle between my two elder brothers and my two younger, then the twins arrived and the whispers really heated up, especially at festivals, after the wine had been flowing for several hours: “Spirit of Fire? Something’s on fire, but I’m not sure it’s his spirit.” And my thoughts followed in suit, and I believed the jokes that my parents would never stop having children, that they would populate their own nation with Fëanorions, and just when I had begun to entertain the shy hope that their eighth child would give us a sister, then my mother left home, and we went with our father to Formenos.

But now, before that scrabbling slide that left us exiled and damned in Middle-earth, we are four brothers, and we live in Tirion, except in the summers, when we go to Formenos. Actually, the house is just outside of Tirion, on a plot of land situated that—should you stand atop our roof on tiptoe and crane your neck as far as it would go—you can see Tirion rising over the trees to the south, a beacon in a rugged green sea. Our house is a sprawling stone monstrosity that Ada likes to add onto whenever he begets another son or one of his begotten gets an itch to pursue a new trade or hobby, and the size of his land supports my belief that he will beget a thousand children before our mother gets tired of it all and makes him sleep by himself. The wings of the house link into each other and back into themselves like one of the puzzles that Nelyo will give Carnistir and I to do when he wants to keep us out of the way—puzzles that we have determined are impossible to solve—wings enclosing courtyards and gardens and fountains. Productive noise always echoes through the long hallways, and every day of the week but one, I am part of that productivity: banging out awkward crafts with my mother or father, rustling through stacks of parchment, scratching out lettering exercises with my ragged quill. But for this one day, I am granted freedom—an ambiguous gift because I am deemed too young to wander the forest on my own and my two elder brothers are always busy with their own pursuits—and those noisy halls become very lonely.

Carnistir has lessons only three days out of the week—a day of craft with our mother and two days of lore with our father—so he is left in the bustling and lonely halls more often than I. Sometimes, we wander into our parents’ workrooms, where we can slip underfoot, unnoticed in the commotion of nervous apprentices quietly trying to gain our parents’ attention and regard, our footsteps softer than the gentle nips of chisel on stone or the soft hiss of steam cooling steel. And then there are the assistants, trying to earn apprenticeships through industrious loyalty: keeping the floors swept and the tools sharp and the babies—as they called Carnistir and I—out from underfoot.

We evade their notice for as long as possible, darting among legs and crouching underneath worktables, to watch our parents work. My mother is patient and gentle—a natural teacher—and she always pauses to answer the apprentices’ timid inquiries, softening each criticism with a sprinkle of praise. But Ada—who commands the most promising apprentices in Aman—never even turns when he answers their questions, and his answers roll from his tongue with the nonchalance of a raindrop falling from a leaf, and it is he whom I love to watch the most. His forge is the most unpleasant place on the property—hot and dirty, and always with the sanguine odor of hot metal—but I love it. I have yet to begin my own training there, for my daylong lessons with him are being carried out for now in his laboratory, setting gemstones and engraving designs on jewelry—tedious work that makes my eyes cross and shoulders ache—but I always assume that I would eventually take my apprenticeship beside him in his forge. What is the son of Fëanaro and Nerdanel if not a craftsman, and I have little liking for my mother’s work. My elder brothers, mysteriously, only do a day of work each week with our father, in the forge, crafting everything from farming equipment to gold necklaces to beautiful and blunt ceremonial swords. The rest of the week—even their day off—Nelyo spends in the library and Macalaurë spends in the music room, and Ada never protests.

We pass his forge now. It stands a bit away from the house, and I cannot resist slipping inside, darting with Carnistir beneath a worktable when the nearest assistant turns at our father’s command to work the bellows. The floor is warm and grit grinds beneath my boots, and I clasp Carnistir in my arms to keep him from surpassing the parameters of the worktable, where his stray, trusting limbs might cause him to be injured.

I will be the crafty son I know our father longs to teach, and I make myself love the forge for his presence alone, kneeling on the hard and gritty floor beneath his worktable, watching him craft ceremonial armor for Manwë. One of the assistants holds the slab of gleaming steel to an anvil, and I watch Ada rear back again and again to strike it with a sledgehammer, while the assistant winces at the reverberations buzzing through his bones but Ada never flinches. He is slender in the way of the Elves, in a way that doesn’t betray his strength, but when he lifts that hammer, his muscles flex and the fires of the forge gleam gold on the mist of sweat on his arms, and he looks more a Vala than an Elf.

Inevitably, one of the bustling, disapproving assistants spots us there, and we are lifted under our arms and deposited outside before Ada even had the chance to turn and see us. But I wish for him to turn—oh, how I wish for it—and I twist my neck back to stare at him, hoping. Would he turn, I know he will see my eagerness, and I will be allowed into the forge beside him—a mark of maturity, for the forge is a dangerous place, but certainly a place for one of Fëanaro’s elder sons—and I won’t have to squint at engravings and tiny bits of diamond any longer. But I am on my feet in the cool grass, and the door to the forge thumps shut behind me. Even on the hottest days—like today—I shiver as the breeze caresses the damp sheen of sweat that the forge has left on my skin. Sweat, I learned, for our people, whose bodies adjust easily to a wide range of temperatures, means heat. Or desire.

Laurelin has waxed fully, casting the day in brilliant gold that stings my eyes, and Carnistir winces and whines, and I put my arm around him and say, “Let’s go find Nelyo.”

Nelyo, we have learned, is the best to seek on these days because Nana’s workshop is more open than Ada’s, and she is less distracted by her work, and she would spot us within a few minutes and lead us outside by our hands, her voice only thinly veiled with patience. And, besides, I do not like my mother’s work. Chipping sculptures from blocks of stone is too like chipping shaky engravings into pendants—too tedious for my liking. And Macalaurë would not see us at all, were we to enter the music room that Ada had built for him, because he becomes nearly blind when he starts plucking chords on his harp and scribbling down music notes to be sent to his Telerin tutor in Alqualondë. And were we to make our presence known, he would become angry and chase us from the room and prop a chair beneath the doorknob so that we could not reenter. Music isn’t to my liking anyway, except for listening after supper, and Macalaurë’s insipid repetition of scales that are perfect the first time he sings them wears on one’s nerves after only a short time.

Nelyo is always busy too, and he works in the library that our father built when he first built the house. Ours is the only house I know that has a library—besides grandfather Finwë’s palace, which has a library for use by his lords and scholars—because our people can remember what they will for as long as they wish, and there is little need to write things down. Before my father was born, a Noldo named Rumil concocted a form of writing that was handy to use when sending messages, and the Eldar thought writing was quite revolutionary, if not a bit useless in daily life, made more so by the fact that—while easy to represent our Noldorin dialect and, to a lesser degree, that of the Vanyar—our Telerin kin found their own speech hard to render with Rumil’s letters. It was my father who first fell in love with the peculiar little scribbles of script, but he found them flawed and rewrote Rumil’s alphabet so that redundancies and inconsistencies were erased and so that the speech of the Teleri and the Vanyar—even the Valar, if one were so inclined—could be represented as easily as his native Noldorin. It was not long before he discovered the beautiful practicality of books, where facts and ideas could be scribed and shared by many without the inconvenience of wearying travel and long counsels. He was young when Aulë took him as an apprentice—an appointment that took up most of his time—but he wrote often to our grandfather Mahtan, then the greatest smith of the Noldor, and to the jewel-smiths and miners in Formenos, sharing his ideas and asking for theirs in turn. Grandfather Mahtan would tell us of our father in those days, jesting that Fëanaro was his most avid apprentice, although he never met the diligent young student until he opened his door one day to find a handsome black-haired Noldo standing on his front step, asking for his daughter’s hand in marriage. “‘Who are you, Moriquendi?’ I said,” Mahtan would growl in his most intimidating voice, and Carnistir and I would shrink against each other, “‘I give not my daughters to dark strangers!’ And the cheeky little brat raised his eyebrows at me and said, ‘A stranger I am not—less I am Moriquendi—for I am Fëanaro, son of High King Finwë, and I have been apprenticed to you for the last ten years. How can you know me not?’ ” And all would laugh, Mahtan the loudest of all, although everyone knows this wasn’t the way it had happened at all.

Few have Ada’s love of books, but my brother Nelyo does, and Carnistir and I enter the library to find him, seated at his desk that sits facing our father’s, in a patch of light flowing through the high windows, scribbling furiously onto parchment. When Nelyo closes the doors—as is his habit, to muffle the intrusive noise of the workshops and forges—the library becomes a high-ceilinged oven, and even the dust in the air gleams gold, as though aflame. Carnistir sneezes when we first enter, and I have to give him a sharp look of reproach to keep him from wiping his wet hand on my sleeve, as is his wont lately. I take his hand (the dry one) and lead him over to where Nelyo sits, so furious in his writing that he doesn’t hear Carnistir’s sneeze or notice our approach.

“Nelyo,” I say just before we reach him, because one time I’d touched him before speaking his name, and he’d been so startled that he left a long black smear of ink across the parchment and ruined a nearly finished page. Carnistir is dragging his feet and waving his free hand in the direction of the piles of colorful illustrated parchments that Ada set to the side on a table, so I haul him behind me without taking my eyes from Nelyo. “Nelyo,” I say again, and he smiles, finishes the word he is writing, and sets down his quill.

“Tyelkormo. Carnistir,” he says.

“Nelyo,” I say again, nearly panting in my eagerness to stand before my eldest brother’s knees, yanking Carnistir’s arm and making him whimper. “Nelyo.”

And then I’m there, before his knees, looking up at him and doubting that I’ll ever be so tall (I won’t be), and he says, “Whatever seems to be the matter?”

“We’re bored, Nelyo.”

He nods. He was given the day off too—as was Macalaurë—but Nelyo doesn’t seem to understand that his day off is supposed to be spent doing things that he doesn’t do every other day of the week. Macalaurë doesn’t understand that either. Nor do Ada and Nana. In fact, Carnistir and I are the only ones in the house that understand this concept.

“What is Macalaurë doing?” he asks, and I roll my eyes at him, and he nods and says, “Mmm. I suspected as much,” and I can see his lips trying to stay stern, but inevitably, he smirks a bit, then breaks into a wide grin, and Carnistir and I tussle to climb onto his lap first. I, being larger and older, win, as I always do, tossing my legs across both of his to bar Carnistir from climbing up beside me. Triumphant, I settle against his shoulder, and Carnistir whines and pushes at my feet, little pinkish spots rising to color his cheeks. “Now, now,” Nelyo says, and I can feel his voice in my ear as well as hear it, and he gently lifts my legs so that Carnistir can scramble up, pulling at great fistfuls of Nelyo’s clothes in his graceless manner and settling opposite me, his lips pushed out in a pout and his big dark eyes brimming with tears.

“Now, what exactly do you suggest I do for you, Turkafinwë Tyelkormo?”

“Take us hunting in the forest!” I had long ago learned to ask first for that which I know I will never receive in order to get what I’d be content to receive. Nelyo’s arm tightens around me, and he says, “Tyelkormo, I wish I could, but I am very busy today. Could I hold your interest with a bit of reading?”

“Perhaps my interest could be held,” I say, trying to emulate his noble manner, but I sound silly and made myself laugh.

Nelyo draws Carnistir and me closer against his chest, freeing his arms a bit so that he can lift a book from the desk in front of him and riffle through the pages. The book’s cover is exquisite: bound in rich, dark red-brown leather and inlaid with silver letters and designs. The cover alone, I know, must have taken our father days to construct, just as the sheaves of parchment within had taken Nelyo many laborious hours to produce. There is no mistaking Nelyo’s hand, for it is neat and precise, each letter exactly like its brothers in the sentences beside it, no stem longer than another, no spacing wider on one page than the next. Like our father’s, only our father’s is less stilted and at time flows into graceful superfluity that made his letters superior to Nelyo’s.

I love to listen to Nelyo read. Just as I love to listen to Macalaurë sing (when he isn’t singing the same bar over and over again for two hours, that is) and love to watch my parents at their work, I love the sound of Nelyo’s voice reciting the words that he has written—or sometimes, words that our father has written, or one of the other excellent craftsmen north in Formenos—his voice caressing those words in a way that you know that this was how our language was meant to be spoken. In later years, I would learn many languages, becoming fluent first—at our father’s bidding—in the dialects of the Teleri and the Vanyar, then spending many hours in Oromë’s tutelage, learning the speech of all the beasts on land, in air, and in sea, and when I listened the lilting birdsong or the creaking warbles of the whales beneath the waves, then I would find Noldorin to be inferior. Even the quick and musical Telerin or the gilded speech of the Vanyar sounded superior to the plodding and practical Noldorin. But then I would hear Nelyo read the words that he and Ada had crafted, and I would understand the beauty of my people, and for that moment, I would close my eyes and be content in the halls and courtyards that so possessed the Noldor.

I like to lean my head into the soft spot just below the bones of Nelyo’s shoulder and absorb his speech with all of my senses. With my ear to his chest, his voice rumbles beneath his heartbeat, and the side of my face is warmed by him, and I can smell the clean cottony smell of his tunic and—just beneath—the unique Nelyo-smell: light through leaves. At times, in adulthood, I would suddenly encounter in the forest, with the newborn Sun shining down through the leaves and haloing them in rainbows. I would stand paralyzed in those moments, my eyes closed to the Sun’s beauty, breathing deeply and trying to recapture my time with Nelyo, being held in a languid innocence I didn’t know then to appreciate, feeling his spirit burning beside my own, in the special connection shared by brothers, and when the breeze chased away the smell of memory, my cheeks would be soaked and my throat so tight that I could barely breathe, and I would desert whatever pursuit or quarry had brought me to that place to stand for hours, waiting for the breeze to die so that I could smell the light through the leaves and return to Nelyo in the library.

I raise my face to study his, the most beautiful of my brothers: Although history would dispute the appearances and virtues of the Fëanorions, I remained convinced of this. Fëanaro, created the most perfect of all the Elves, in all aspects of body as well as mind, begot beautiful sons: Curufinwë, most in his likeness, but pointier and shrewder; Macalaurë, with his soft manner and gentle smile; Carnistir, who was full of turmoil, and his dark eyes would burn into you with an intensity only Ada could exceed; the twins, identical, fiery and impish. And me, with my hair the color of honey and enough blue in my eyes that I was often mistaken for a Vanya when I walked in Tirion. (In my youth, I would complain most of my blue eyes, which set me apart from the rest of my family, and Ada would placate me by saying, “That’s because I was staring up at the blue, blue sky when I begot you.” And Nana would blush and nudge him in the arm, and Macalaurë would look vaguely uncomfortable, although I didn’t then know why.)

My complaints became vague as I aged only because I realized that, beside Nelyo, none of my features set me apart from my family the way that, unprotesting, he was set apart. Even my dark blond hair and bluish eyes (I still deny that they are, in fact, entirely blue), rare among the Noldor, are dulled next to Nelyo. It isn’t exactly that Nelyo has any attributes that are rare among our people, for his features, taken individually, are common enough, but rather that he seems to have inherited the most radical traits of each of our ancestors. His hair, from a distance, is vividly red—not the rusty, orangish hue that isn’t uncommon in some families—a deep copper, like our mother’s. His hair is deceptive, however, for if one looks close enough (as I often do, sitting on his lap in the library), it becomes clear that the stunning color comes, not just from the red, but from the blond and brown strands that thread throughout: grandmother Istarnië and grandfather Finwë, respectively, I’d always assumed. His height and imposing stature come from grandfather Finwë as well, he who was a warrior and a protector of his people before he was ever a husband, father, or king. His sonorous voice belongs to grandfather Mahtan, whose laughter can capture a room and rare anger terrifies us. And his face is Ada’s, beautiful enough to be one of our mother’s sculptures of the Valar.

Nelyo’s eyes are the only trait that are his own, as mine are my own, but unlike mine, his at first seem typical for the Noldor: gray like our steel, gray like our work tunics, sullied by ash from the forge, gray like the stones we used to build our houses. Nelyo’s eyes are gray like all of those things yet like none of them at all, for there are specks in his eyes that are almost silver and shine at times like mirrors. Ada always credited Telperion, for Nelyo was born beside a river as Telperion waxed at her fullest, and Ada told us that the first light to fall upon Nelyo’s eyes was the sparkle of silver light upon silver water.

I feel myself falling asleep as he reads—and I do not want to fall asleep! I do not want to miss his words! I glance over at Carnistir, whose dark eyes are closed, his eyelashes like velvet on his cheeks, and fidget until my forehead presses uncomfortably against Nelyo’s collarbone, where I am sure I will not sleep. His voice falters; I look up, and his eyes meet mine, and I realize that he fears that I am uncomfortable. Indeed, I will soon grow out of being able to sit like this with him. Will he miss it? Or will he be grateful to have only one little brother to make his feet numb and fall asleep and drool down the front of his tunic? (As Carnistir is doing, I notice with some annoyance.) I glance up at him again, and his words falter, and smile teases his lips. His arm tightens around me.

Most of the time, I can’t even tell you what Nelyo reads to us. It involves the work he does with our father, I know, but I don’t really know what that work involves. There are no rooms in our Tirion house that are off-limits to us: the workrooms, the library, even my parents’ bedroom are ours to enter freely. But, sometimes, on the days that Ada works with Nelyo, they go into Ada’s laboratory and shut the door for hours. Nana gives me breaks from my lessons, and I roam the hallways for my ten minutes of freedom, desperate to stretch my legs but more desperate to press against the laboratory door and try to hear what is being said. Once, I took the doorknob in my hand and went to turn it slowly, to ease the door open and slide into the room unnoticed, as I did into Ada’s forge and Nana’s workroom, but the knob stuck in my hand, and I realized—with a surprised lurch of my heart—that the door was locked.

Nelyo is said by our father to be inquisitive but not very artistic. He likes to figure out puzzles; he likes to categorize things and decipher meanings; he likes to pick apart webs into individual, smooth strands. He likes neat, clean explanations that transcend personal taste and subjective aesthetics. Metals and stones sing to my father in a language none of us can understand—except, perhaps, our mother and later, Curufinwë—but to Nelyo, they each represent a specific set of tendencies that beg him to classify them. This was what he reads to us: The attributes of each of my father’s metals and alloys and the extrapolation of the data (what was extrapolation? what was data? the words made me cold and anxious) to discern the components of each. Components. Everything, to Nelyo, is components within components within components. I feel dizzy and a bit detached from my body to contemplate it; sliced away from oneness with Arda, from oneness with our people, but Nelyo likes to sever those connections into components and drop them into neat little compartments in his mind. I asked him once, what is a component? And he said it was a part, like the Noldor are a component of the Eldar, and the House of Finwë is a component of the Noldor, and the House of Fëanaro is a component of the House of Finwe, and I am a component of the House of Fëanaro. I wondered what components were within me. My hands? My feet? My bluish eyes? Components of Turkafinwë Tyelkormo, component of the House of Fëanaro, of the House of Finwë, of the Noldor, of the Eldar, of the Quendi, of Arda, of the—what went higher than that? Grandfather Finwë spoke at times of the Valar, but Ada and Nelyo grew quiet and tense in those moments, and I believe they questioned the Valar’s role in their scheme of components.

The side of my face is drowned by Nelyo’s sleepy warmth, and his voice is buzzing like dragonflies over the hot rocks beside the lake in Formenos, and I jerk my head upright. Stay awake! Nelyo’s hand cups my head and strokes my oddly-colored hair, and I hear myself whimper a bit as he lowers my head back to his shoulder. Opposite me, Carnistir’s brow furrows and he fidgets, kicking me in the leg, jarring me back to wakefulness. Nelyo has stopped reading again, and I look up and meet his eyes. “Are you tired? Do you wish to sleep?” he asks, and I shake my head furiously. “Wait here a moment,” he says, and I am bumped from his leg so that he can stand and lift Carnistir, cradling him gently so as not to wake him, and lay him on the couch in the corner. There is a cloak thrown and forgotten across the back of the couch and—lacking a proper blanket—Nelyo covers Carnistir with it. I watch him shake the wrinkles from the soft material and tried to discern if it belonged to Ada or to Nelyo; it is hard to tell in these days, as they wear nearly the same size clothing. Carnistir pulls his knees to his chest and sinks into the cushions, and Nelyo kisses his forehead and smoothes his hair and leaves him to his sleep.

And returns to me. I bound into his lap before he even settles fully into his chair, and he laughs and clasps me close. “Ilúvatar in Ea!” he chides, a mild swear that he and Macalaurë like to use, having learned it from our father, that makes Nana scowl. But Nana is not here right now, so I am free to laugh and sit more comfortably with my legs draped across both of his, without sharing his embrace with Carnistir, who is still young and dumb and falls asleep and gets relinquished to the couch.

“Turko,” he says, and his fingers stroke my hair, find a knot, and begin to unwind it. I try to swat his hand away, but he jams me into his chest with his other arm, and I know better than to fight, or I will end up with Carnistir, relinquished to the couch. Anyway, it isn’t too bad; at least Nelyo is gentle. He works at the knot without yanking at my head, as Ada and Nana have a tendency to do, although I suppose that years of untangling first Nelyo’s hair, then Macalaurë’s, and now mine and Carnistir’s gives them limited patience for the task, and they always silence my complaints with a stern “Well you should have thought to restrain your hair” or “Well you should take the occasional initiative to comb it yourself.”

“Don’t call me that,” I say, protesting the name Turko—a shortened version of my father-name Turkafinwë—that he and Macalaurë have recently decided to call me. Now they have Carnistir doing it too, tailing me around the house, chirping “Turko! Turko!” and stepping on the backs of my feet.

“Why should I not call you that? You call me Nelyo and Macalaurë Cano. Do you not?”

I don’t know how to respond to the truth of his observations, so I sit silently and let him work the knot from my hair.

“Tyelkormo is too cumbersome,” he goes on. “Awkward. I think Nana was a bit mad when she chose that for your name, and perhaps, you were a bit mad when you asked to be known by it.”

I have always liked my mother-name Tyelkormo. It means “hasty riser,” and while I don’t know if this was in fact virtuous, I like the idea of being the first of my family at task in the mornings. It seems efficient and conscientious, something Ada would admire, to someday enter his forge right as Laurelin began to blossom, still yawning and fumbling with the ties on his work tunic, and find me already intently at work. I say as much to Nelyo: “I like Tyelkormo better.”

The knot unworked, he runs his fingers through my hair a couple of times, and meeting no further snags, embraces me with both arms again. “I’ll tell you what, Turko,” he says. “If you stop calling me Nelyo and start calling me Maitimo, then I shall call you Tyelkormo forevermore, until you have settled yourself completely in Ada’s shadow and decide that you would rather be known by your father-name.”

I wrinkle my nose. “I shall never be called Turkafinwë.” Both of my elder brothers go by their mother-names, and when I heard them introduced as Nelyafinwë and Canafinwë—eldest sons of Fëanaro—at festivals, then I always feel a moment of queasy doubt that the owners of such cumbersome, grandiose names could possibly be my brothers.

“Perhaps you shall decide differently when you are older. Once you have met your aims of emulating Ada’s likeness, maybe you would rather take the name that he has given you.”

Nelyo’s tone is overly sweet, and I know that he is teasing me. He and Macalaurë both tease my ambitions at times, and once I had been hurt by it, and Nana had taken me aside and explained that Nelyo and Macalaurë had both had the same ambitions once, and worked very hard to achieve them, and discovered that their feet fell not on our father’s road, and they had thought themselves disappointments. How could that be so? I had asked her. How could they ever doubt their worth to him? Did Ada not spend hours in private counsel with Nelyo? Did he not celebrate Macalaurë, who would one day surpass even the Telerin minstrels? And Nana had said, “Ada loves not your choice trade or even your talents but that you are his son, created from the union of our marriage, the gift of our eternal love.”

“Ada goes not by his father-name and nor shall I,” I say indignantly to Nelyo. “You and Macalaurë prefer your mother-names—and even little Carnistir—and I shall never be known as Turkafinwë.”

Nelyo laughs and swings me into a half-lying position across his lap, submissive, with his one arm binding my knees and the other curled around my torso to bind my arms. My head is cradled in the crook of his elbow. Part of me wants to fight, to prove that I am old enough and strong enough to break free, but it is so rare that he allows himself to treat me as he had before Carnistir had been born—when I was still the baby—that I resign myself to enjoy it, and settle against his arm. I feel him relax as well, until I am no longer restrained, and he says in a gentle voice, “You have a temper, little one,” and I realize that, to him, I must have sounded quite querulous. Laurelin is bright, and golden light floods the library and spills onto us—Nelyo and me—coaxing the gold from Nelyo’s hair until I don’t feel like I look so odd at all. I am filled with quivering joy, and Nelyo cuddles my close, and I knew he feels it too. I tip my head back and watch the dust dance in the golden rays that spill through the high windows and think that even something as insubstantial as dust can find joy here and laugh for no reason, utterly inappropriate and utterly free. Nelyo’s laughter joins mine, and I lean back on his arm, watching the dust dance and feeling Laurelin’s light making my limbs grow weak and heavy, and I close my eyes to escape the brightness.

Chapter Two
  • Wow! I really hope you continue this story because I am in love already! Your imagery is breathtaking and your characterisations are so rich. I find myself adoring Celegorm - which I can assure you I have never done before - and you really do manage to capture the pride and passion of the Noldor people. And as for Maedhros...oh, I want that Elf for myself!! You wrote him so beautifully; it made me want to sort of keep him where he is, in Valinor, so all the awful things in Middle-earth never happen to him. He is one of my favourites at the best of time, and this was...so sweet. And I love how you write Fëanor too - not many people seem to be able to write him in a way which shows his intensity and pride and his love for the work he does without making him seem like an all-round villain, which I never felt he was.

    Please, please write more! I am gripped!

    I am friending your LJ so I can keep track of this, if that's OK!

    Again: Wow.

    *goes to rec fic to people*
    • Thank you so much, Enismirdal!
      This was my first attempt at posting any of my Silmarillion writing and my first attempt at posting writing on the Internet at all, and so I was--admittedly--highly nervous about the whole ordeal. I began this story last August, and it has stolen a pretty significant piece of my heart over the last year.

      I had a pretty crappy day yesterday, but when I saw your comment, it made me certain that today is going to be better! Thank you for writing so many nice things, and I am honored that you want to add me to your Friends list and keep following this tale. If you have any writing posted anywhere, please let me know. I would love to return the favor and read something of yours.

      I am nearing completion of the entire first part of this story. I had intended, then, to do weekly postings on fanfiction.net, but I just got an author account on HASA and might post some additional chapters on there first. My problem is that I am of the old-school print-publication world where you don't publish until every last detail is absolutely perfect. I'm trying to overcome that; we'll see! ;) Either way, I will "SSP" the Henneth-Annun list when I post more chapters. (I'm assuming that's how you found this?)
      Thank you again so much for brightening my weekend! Best wishes,
      Dawn Felagund
      • Interestingly, I actually found you off the Silmfics yahoo group. I have been keeping an eye on them lately since the mod seems to have vanished into the ether and isn't approving new members' messages any more, so I checked the member list to see if anyone else had been joining recently and was likely to want to post to the list (as I am thinking of maybe e-mailing the mod to see if she needs someone else to take over admin so the list doesn't just die). I saw the link in your Yahoo profile and came to investigate!

        I am very glad you're archiving somewhere :D

        Yes, I've written a bit, but it's basically all slash (though rarely explicit) - just to warn you if that's not really your thing. The recent stuff is by and large Silmfic but I started out with fluffy Lord of the Rings Elves *grins*. If you're still interested, they are on LOTRfanfic.com (which is currently down, alas), some on Of Elves and Men, or my attempt at a website (just to note, though, that there are some slashy pictures on my website).
        • Thanks for the links! I will definitely check them out! I wish I could right now, but alas, I have to balance my bank account and go to a birthday party. ::sigh:: Fun stuff.

          No, I'm not bothered in the least by slash. I am a liberal married woman with a bisexual sister, so almost anything goes with me ;P

          That's curious about Silmfics. I had wondered why I hadn't gotten any posts from them in a while, but I just joined Henneth-Annun like a month or so ago and have been inundated with that and didn't have time to think much of it. (I have actually been a Silmfics member for some months now but just changed my membership to a different account. That's probably why I showed up as a new member.) I get the impression (and I could be wrong) that a lot of the old Sil-people have dropped off the face of the fan fiction earth and the new folks just aren't organized yet. I have started my own Silmarillion group but have been so busy with writing and running an RPG campaign that I haven't had time to recruit for it yet. The good thing is that the story is almost done and the RPG is hovering--albeit ponderously--off the ground, so my fingers are crossed that it will happen soon.

          I'm glad to meet another Sil person out there! Maybe we can get our apathetic cohorts organized and talking/writing about the Sil again? I do hope!
          Dawn Felagund
  • Oh my goodness.

    Well..it took me a while to get past the word "forge" and the naughty images it invoked. But once I did, I became completely enthralled with your story. The realness you achieve, and your imagery and the relationships - it is all wonderful.

    I particularly like the little bits of humour you add (I was looking at the sky when I begot you - and then Nerdanel blushing). I'm so in awe of your depiction of Feanor. We haven't met him yet in your story but he is already intense and passionate and wise and just perfect. (Not perfect himself, your depiction is perfect.)

    I think my favourite line is:

    "When my brothers and I were angry at our father for his strict expectations, we would joke with each other to hide the sting of his criticisms, saying that Ada had been born speaking and walking, with a hammer in one hand and a quill in another, decrying the state of modern midwifery that forced him to be born naked and in such an unsavory manner. "

    For some reason, that just screams "Feanor"

    I also liked:

    "He is slender in the way of the Elves, in a way that doesn't betray his strength, but when he lifts that hammer, his muscles flex and the fires of the forge gleam gold on the mist of sweat on his arms, and he looks more a Vala than an Elf."

    for other (obvious) reasons.

    Please post more. Please.

    • Arandil,
      Thank you so much for the review and the wonderful comments! I'm glad you enjoyed the story and assure you that I will be posting more soon. Unfortunately, work has been god-awful busy this week, for the first time in a long time--it figures, since this is where I do most of my writing and posting, and now that I actually want to get some done....

      Yes, I agree with you heartily about Feanor. I mean, the guy had seven kids. How can I not capitalize on the--err, romantic?--aspects of that? Besides, he is acknowledged as being exceptionally good-looking. And I get to enjoy the images of him while I put them down on paper, so I guarantee you more sexy-Feanor in chapters to come.

      Thanks again and have a great day!
      Dawn Felagund
  • (no subject) - satismagic
    • Hooray! A long review!

      First of all, I would never ask you to stop nitpicking. I am the nitpicker of nitpicking. Just ask poor Doyonil, who asked me to be her beta, and in her first letter back to me said, "I had no idea betaing could be so intense...."

      "His hair is so dark that the light on it makes it glow gold, as if the light is being reflected in a mirror."
      Dammit. Someone else noticed it :) Yes, this line was troubling me too. I have a very specific image I am trying to convey but am not quite sure how to say it. I will think on it and do something about it.

      "...our house in Tirion is full of noise and loneliness..."
      Yes, the "loneliness" refers to the fact that everyone else is so busy, but the children are given a day off as a "treat," which it is not. They are lonely. Perhaps I need to rephrase this too?

      "I know this really idiotic of me... but to read Silmarillion stories in American spelling always makes me wrinkle my nose. *runs and hides*)"
      LOL! I agree: American spelling and grammar really is graceless. Alas, it is what I know and what my word processor won't punish :)

      The light of the trees is something I think about a lot, probably more than a normal person should. I wonder how it looked in the sky. Was the sky even blue? (I hope it was because I talk about it a lot in this story!) My husband and I were driving home, into the sunset, one day, and the clouds were lit beneath with this beautiful rainbow of colors, and I told him, "That must be how the sky looked in Valinor." (He, of course, by now, knows to nod and say, "Yes, of course it does, Dawn.") I want to add more sky imagery, but I am still twisting its exact appearance around in my head.

      I agree about the challenges of Elves. If anything, I am guilty of humanizing my Elves too much, I think. I am trying to do the opposite of how people often conveniently portray Elves as aloof, untouchable beings without emotion. If anything, I think The Silmarillion shows how human Elves are, how prone to excruciating love and bad judgment (often as a result of that love, as in the case of Feanor), just like everyone else, and my point in this story was to move beyond their status as some kind of superior being and reveal the psychology beneath. That sounds unattainable even as I write it, but such were my thoughts upon entering this project.

      I can't thank you enough for the kind words and constructive suggestions! I respect your writing highly and so it means a lot to have you read my story and give me your thoughts. Thank you again!
      Dawn Felagund
      • (no subject) - satismagic
        • I have HoMe 10 and 12. They were hard to come by and rather expensive, but what kind of Feanor fanatic would turn down the opportunity to own an essay titled "The Shibboleth of Feanor?" (Which, disappointingly, covers the meanings of the names of every member of Finwe's house except the Feanorians. Argh!)

          I have always wanted the Letters. As for HoMe 11, if I have even seen it in stores, I do not recall it. And Vinyar Tengwar No. 39? ::embarrassed, clueless stare::

          "But thinking Elves through I have also encountered a really basic problem that really gets me thinking again and again... but I won't ramble on... sorry to spam your LJ like that!"

          Come on! That's not even right! You get me all eager to hear about this and then don't write it? :) That's cruel.... (And I don't consider a good discussion "spam" in any place. I love long messages and have been known to go a little long myself.)

          As for liking your storytelling: You wrote a romance 1) about Gandalf and 2) with an original female character and made it not only believable but incredibly real and poignant. And I didn't want to paint my computer screen black at the thought of an OC female. That makes you my hero :)
  • Chapter One Review

    Let me start by saying that usually, Feanorions are not my thing. My heart, as a rule, lies very much in Lothlórien. However, if you've ever role-played you'll know how characters can sneak into your affections! At some point in the last few months, Celegorm moved into my brain, unpacked and is now making coffee. *Offers you a cup* I have to admit... he's not so bad really... which is what makes your story so fascinating!

    I personally do not see how Celegorm could have been 'evil'... after all the Valar gave him Huan and I do not think they would make such a gift to him if he had *always* been bad. I am looking forward to seeing how you make him change and grow.

    His interactions with his brothers are interesting... he is very much a middle child at this point and yet seems not to have any major problems with being both older and younger brother.

    I snicker at the thought of Fëanor trying to get Nelyo to say such a complicated name at such a young age, it seems very in character for him! It must have been frustrating for his sons though, to be under such pressure and maybe they were on the slippery slope down even then.

    You paint such a lovely picture of his family life... strict maybe but loving, so it seems almost unbelievable when their mother leaves. It is a sad and sudden end to what was, at least for a while, a wonderful relationship.

    I adore the descriptions of the house and how it grows with each child! It also fits... big and complicated, like their family. *Snickers* Nerdanel must have been exhausted just at the thought of birthing more children!

    Even at this point he seems more like his Father than his brothers, already stubborn and determined to follow in his Father's footsteps. Yet he also seems more carefree than his older brothers, though that's probably just his age!

    Macalaurë having a Telerin tutor is a very nice touch.

    Ahh the library... this is the bit that inspired me to write that drabble! It seems strange to think of libraries being a rare thing, especially for the Noldor.

    Small comment - I'm not sure 'concocted' was the best word to use in regards to Rúmil's letters, makes it sound a bit haphazard. But that's just my (admittedly biased) opinion!

    The image of Nelyo so absorbed in his work is very sweet - I feel sorry for him always being the one who gets pounced on!

    Heehee, sneaky Celegorm! Yes, some traits were *always* there!
    Again the three brothers together are just adorable!

    Celegorm's skill with languages is interesting, something that he has in common with Rúmil. I wonder if he was one of his tutors, for he was said to know (almost?) every language there was. (But you probably know that already!)

    Nice to know that even when he grew up, he never forgot those moments of simple pleasure. Given what he must have been going through then, I feel very sorry for him!

    I'm glad you used the blond version of Celegorm by the way, as that is the version I have in my head! *He waves*

    *Ahem* 'Hasty riser' certainly gives my over-slashed mind some interesting ideas, I must say! But yes, I can see how it would work in other ways as well!

    And with that I will stop, as this review is by now ridiculously long and there are three more chapters yet!

    Tux - off for coffee with Celegorm!
    • Re: Chapter One Review

      Wow! And I thought I was the only person who likes Celegorm! You're thoughts are mine exactly: How can an Elf from Valinor--and one who is favored by a Vala--be evil? Hence the story, to trace some of the reasons that might be.

      In my case, Celegorm is only fourteen and so came into the apartment, got into the soda, tore all the books off the shelf, and brought in three dozen locusts and set them loose in the house. I let him write to keep him quiet and my apartment bug-free :)

      Any idea why your Celegorm snuck up on you? (Mine did because I thought he'd be the hardest character to write and so invited him in first.)

      Ahh the library... this is the bit that inspired me to write that drabble! It seems strange to think of libraries being a rare thing, especially for the Noldor.

      Yes, I did a double-take in the part of LaCE (I think) where Tolkien says that the Elves didn't generally keep books. I always figured Feanor to be the opposite.

      And, again, it is so flattering that it inspired you!

      Small comment - I'm not sure 'concocted' was the best word to use in regards to Rúmil's letters, makes it sound a bit haphazard. But that's just my (admittedly biased) opinion!

      Yes, I like to experiment with odd verbs, if you couldn't tell. Sometimes it works, and sometimes...well, you know :) I appreciate that you pointed this out to me. Thinking on this word, I agree with you, and it probably would have slipped my notice otherwise.

      As for Rumil, you'll probably hate what I do with his character :( I'm going to hide during that chapter and never check my email or journal until the tomatoes have rotted enough to not be dangerous anymore. Although I might change it; I have a lot of changing to do in the later chapters, as many of them were experiments.

      Celegorm's skill with languages is interesting, something that he has in common with Rúmil. I wonder if he was one of his tutors, for he was said to know (almost?) every language there was. (But you probably know that already!)

      Interesting...I'd never considered that possibility before. I'd always figured that his "animal speech" was mostly innate and honed during his time with Orome. And his excellent speaking ability I'd figured came, of course, from his overly locquacious and troublesome father :) (Who, incidentally, is a student of Rumil in my story!)

      I'm glad you used the blond version of Celegorm by the way, as that is the version I have in my head! *He waves*

      ::waves back:: Hi Celegorm! ::begs:: I have writer's block! Please help.... :(

      Yes, I like him blond too. I know people get really irate over this, but this is how I've pictured him since the first time I read The Sil, and I have trouble imagining a dark-haired guy earning the epithet "the Fair."

      *Ahem* 'Hasty riser' certainly gives my over-slashed mind some interesting ideas, I must say! But yes, I can see how it would work in other ways as well!

      LOL! Yes, I always think this too! (And I'm glad you said it first!)

      Thank you so much for the long and detailed review! I appreciate knowing what individual parts work and which don't...and good luck with your own Celegorm :)

      • Re: Chapter One Review

        Any idea why your Celegorm snuck up on you? (Mine did because I thought he'd be the hardest character to write and so invited him in first.)

        I think it was first the way he was portrayed in the RPG. I had always stayed away from Feanorions before because, well, they're a lot of work! But I found myself liking this one and, after a battle of wills (during which he proved very good at picking the locks on my brain) I finally gave up and went back to the Silm, to re-read his history. I finally looked past the Kinslaying bit to find a very complex Elf indeed. After that, I was hooked!

        As for Rumil, you'll probably hate what I do with his character :( I'm going to hide during that chapter and never check my email or journal until the tomatoes have rotted enough to not be dangerous anymore. Although I might change it; I have a lot of changing to do in the later chapters, as many of them were experiments.

        O_O Now you have me both worried and curious! But I promise to hold back on hurling tomatoes until I have actually read that bit! *Grins*

        Interesting...I'd never considered that possibility before. I'd always figured that his "animal speech" was mostly innate and honed during his time with Orome. And his excellent speaking ability I'd figured came, of course, from his overly locquacious and troublesome father :) (Who, incidentally, is a student of Rumil in my story!)

        I think you're most likely right, it was just that I was suddenly struck by the similarities between the two!
        I also have a story planned in which Rúmil teaches Fëanor, I think it's a fairly natural assumption! (Though it's been in the planning stages for, err, two years...)

        The review for chapter 2 is done and will be with you in just a moment!
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